Tuesday, December 9, 2008

Damnatio Memoriae


To me:
you are the night
driving me to the light
my finest lovelorn epigraph

stitched from left to right

To you:
I am the tear
shed for the fear of fear
and now a love borne cenotaph

of lust; my broken spear

Hey hey, I'm alive.

I've been very sick--fever, shivers, coughing and all the other loveliness associated with illness. At first, I thought I had contracted Captain Trips, but I guess it was only the flu...

So basically, I have been living on top of a pile of pillows under 3 blankets in my living room floor, and between bouts of unconsciousness, I've been watching Harry Potter (all of the movies to date), Pulp Fiction, Troy, and Star Wars, thinking about various ways that epic stories can be told (Pulp Fiction is sorta epic, c'mon... Samuel L. Jackson is incomparable in the role of Jules Winnfield).

As for the poem (fiction, so no worries, m'kay?), I was reading up a bit about various forms, a convention that I normally eschew. This one is my attempt at crafting a poem in a form called Cinquian, though it deviates on the final lines from the structure. Cinquian is supposed to be 5 lines, starting with 2 syllables, then 4, then 6, then 8 then ending in 2, but I found the rhythm to be less than satisfactory, in my humble philistine opinion. And since I needed to convey an idea, I doubled the form. So you have this: a double cinquain with a twist.

Hope it flies... And yes, you probably know well that I usually avoid rhymers, but this one was jumping to get out that way from when I first rattled the gate. Had to do it. Same thing with all the links--sometimes, I'm just crazy like that.

22 comments:

X. Dell said...

Sorry to hear you've been under the weather. Perhaps that explains the strategically placed bowtie. After all, when you have the flu, it's no time to be showing off.

eric1313 said...

Yeah that was bit goofy...

But the colors are cool!

Glad to see you sir X.

Princess Pointful said...

Get better soon, sir. Nothing like a little cinematic indulgence and fine words to guide you on your way to recovery!!
I particularly like the first verse and the way it is presented... with the "stitched from left to right" line standing alone.

Crashdummie said...

Awww u poor thing. Hope you are doing better. Would offer to send over some veggiesoup, but hopefully by then u'd already recovered.

staying home and catch up on movies is never bad. And you got great taste in movies too! Star wars, Troy, Harry Potter... awesome.

Me, I have kinda retreated to lala-land of the creepy, reading the Dexter series (abt a serial killer with a heart) and watching paranormal tv-serie "Supernatural".

Thats what ones gotto do when u wanna escape reality.

KarmaLennon said...

Sorry to hear you've been ill. Glad it wasn't Captain Trips though! ;) I like the poem, I think I like the form, I think I'll have to try it out. :)

Crushed said...

Hope all is well with you..

You sure it was totally fiction? It looked like an epitath to something gone..

ivan@creativewriting.ca said...

Geez, I get irked when urbanity is called showing off.
What's a poet to do but let it all hang out?

You've stumbled on an important symbol here, Eric.

Ye gads.

What if the centre of Buddhism, say is a set on a porn movie?

There is temple somewhere (Cambodia?) where people are depicted in stone in the art of ....ing and ....ing.

Nirvana?

It blows?

JR's Thumbprints said...

Another interesting poem structure I've seen is linked to Pi. Each line has the same amount of syllables as each digit of Pi. I've read one poem that went on for three or four pages. Of course, the value of Pi can go on for infinity.

Hope you're feeling better.

gingatao said...

Double cinquain with a twist, very cool. I like it, I think the addition of a little rhyme and structural discipline can be a very good thing. Trying new things is always good anyway and it certainly resulted in a very cool little poem.

Jo said...

I hope you're feeling better soon, Eric. There is nothing worse than the winter "crud". Look after yourself...!

("Those who cannot learn from history are doomed to repeat it.")

... George Santayana

You don't want to do that! *heh*

Lana Gramlich said...

Glad you're feeling better. It seems like half the bloggers I know are in the throes of (or just overcoming,) the flu. My sympathies! Hope you're keeping up a regimen of Jewish penicillin (chicken soup.)
Love the poem, particularly the "bastardized" form you used. "Just say no" to the man!

Cléa said...

"the fear of fear" is something you don;t hear about every day. Makes you think about what we define as fear.

Hope you're fully recovered by now.

i beati said...

Hey suck it up - Get over this fluish craziness.. and get out there trampling down other shoppers hahahah

Enemy of the Republic said...

I'm sorry you've been sick, Eric.

Crashdummie said...

hey dude, how are u holding out?

benjibopper said...

no wonder you're sick, double cinnquian with a twist could kill a horse. you're lucky you survived.

it's a good result; i like it.

Cazzie!!! said...

I so hope you get better soon, keep up those fliuds ok, and drink some peppermint tea, hot or cold, it is fabulous :)

Cazzie!!! said...

Oh, and that film line up, outstaning, I love Troy and Pulp Fiction :)

she said...

1313/mr poetry: "it soars!"

there is a time for structured poetry.. following someone else's template..

filling in the boxes and counting words and syllables and lines

but that time has passed

listen to your own muse and honor her

do not tell her what to wear or how and when to wear it

don't tell. ask and listen.

ask and listen and write.


"poetry is the cure!" -hope you feel 123% real soon

love, ~s.

Manic Street Preacher said...

but how have you been? flu's down,eh?
pulp fiction! now we're talkin!

:P

get well soon
:)

\m/

MyUtopia said...

Sorry to hear you have been sick! I loved the stand, one of my favorite books.

Rita said...

Heart touching memories you presenting.

Are they real or imagintion?


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