Monday, December 1, 2008

Plaintive Sigh


the window's still open
late November night

listening for the most
sublime of all words

ever to let breathe
or be given breath to

lying in anticipation
under breath in the attic

and when that word is given

all will be golden--
one more burnished sunset
on San Marina lagoon,
one more coin for the voice
at the end of the line

so just give the word
but listen for the echo,
an arc royale choir
with the breath of stars

just one more syllable
for this wordless poet

one last word
and I'll listen quietly

as the breeze slinks in late
with cold November
through the open window

listening
for one more echo
in the night

31 comments:

Princess Pointful said...

I almost feel a cool breeze rustling through the blinds as I read this. And what a lovely picture to go along with it.

Oh, and regarding your question? I actually just had my last class EVER today! Unfortunately, I still have a ton of other responsibilities keeping me around (dissertation, practicums, etc), but I should be off campus and at my internship in a year and a half. It's a long haul!!

eric1313 said...

Thank you Princess!

I've posted a lot of pictures of the moon, but that one was the clearest images of it I had ever seen.

That and it was hard to find a good image to go with this poem--to me, the moon always works!

And uber-congratulations on the progress toward finishing your PhD! Just remember to keep the fees reasonable, OK?

Charles Gramlich said...

You definitely evoke a good sense of cold and frost here.

ivan@creativewriting.ca said...

Now you're cooking.

Funny that Charles' blog should be RAZORED ZEN

But not just zen here, but a fine poem.

Lana Gramlich said...

Ewwwwwwww, c-c-c-cold!
A good poem, nonetheless. BTW, did you mean "plaintive?" A plaintiff's the person bringing an action against a defendant in court...

she said...

beautiful luna, beautiful poem

listening is key isn't it

for all poets.

open the window, your heart, your mind, your arms

listen and respond.

clearly..

you have this gift.

love, ~s.

petra michelle; Whose role is it anyway? said...

Where have I been during these past creations?! You've been busy!
Are you familiar with Leonard Cohen, Eric? "Plaintive Sigh" has a similar style to his. Emotional,
sensitive, and patient. Lovely!

Thank you for your comment, Eric.
I do dream quite a bit. :))

Crushed said...

Eric, you've gone all melancholic on us...

You seem like a man clinging on to something.
Let go. Be free.

Five5six said...

Wow, very busy with your posts!

Jdilla needs to talk to you, he misses ya, bro.

50161777714072898

pull my old phone number out of the string

JR's Thumbprints said...

Why is it that we listen best when there's no one around, when the night is still?

captain corky said...

"as the breeze slinks in late
with cold November
through the open window"

I love cold silent air. Nothing beats listening to it with a nice cold drink.

i beati said...

oh my title is exquisite- what a match !!

Crashdummie said...

wow, that was wonderfully gloomey eric.

"listening
for one more echo
in the night"


sometimes u just feel like surrendering to the darkness...

Merelyme said...

hey there...

haven't been here in awhile. good to see you still writing into the wee hours. great stuff.

Inside our hands, outside our hearts said...

Lovely


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Five5six said...

Jdilla wants to pay you to write for him. call him, seriously.

Cléa said...

I'm getting an echo of 'one more' here... One more time, maybe?

benjibopper said...

nice haunting feel to this one.

but wordless poet? who dat?

singleton said...

sigh....

MyUtopia said...

Cool! Hope you aren't frozen!

Cazzie!!! said...

Brrr, I feel the coolness, and I listent o the sound of the hand of one hand clapping..yes, silence, picturing the stars, I love this piece :)

Leon Basin said...

That is really good.

eric1313 said...

Charles

Thanks for the encouragement, as always. I was freezing that night, for sure.


Ivan

You go too far!

But I indeed will take the compliment and run with it.


Lana

Fixed!

Yeah, I'm not a fan of the cold either.

eric1313 said...

She

I try! I need to cultivate the gift a bit more, I feel.

Thank you for reading here!


Petra

I am very familiar with Mr Cohen. And I thank you for that glorious comparison, even if I am not really all that much of a comparison to a master like he is.


Crushed

I know! I hold onto feelings so I can call them up like this. Sorry if it's depressing, but the cold does that to me.

eric1313 said...

Five6

Got it. Done. Thank you bro! You da man!


JR

That is quite the question.

Seems the thrum of life gets in the way of too many things. We need to get our own thoughts across, and sometimes lose what is best in another's words.


Captain Corky

You said it. make mine a triple.

eric1313 said...

I beati

Thank you! I try...


Crashy

But always return to the light. You are always welcome there from the gloom...


MerelyMe

Good to see you as well.

The nights are long, but I manage and am rarely a lonely soul.

eric1313 said...

Inside Our Hearts

Thank you! Good to see you.


Five6

Done as well. Good deal.


Clea

There's always room for one more...

Very clever!

eric1313 said...

Benjibopper

I guess I mixed my metaphor a little too strong there.

Thanks for the read!


Singleton

Yeah... that's about it!

Good to see you!


MyUtopia

I'm thawed, thankfully...

Peace out

eric1313 said...

Cazzie!!!

And this piece is very appreciative of your love for it. Silence is the truest voice of God.


Leon Basin

Thanks for the visit! Glad you dropped in.

Manic Street Preacher said...

see, you're more beautiful when you don't rhyme.

as ever.

:)

\m/