Tuesday, September 7, 2010

Lyrics by the Moonlight

How long is the night?

Will it ever surrender?

How long will it fight?

A candle burning slow
and the fires ignite

Battle cries or moans
twisting until light

Falling free into
the maw of lust

Her lips, and her bite
in pain do we trust

Tonight will never die
but tomorrow just might

Just stay with me and see
how long is the night...


eric1313 said...

I'm sure all of you know how much I dislike like most rhyming schemes, and not sure how this would work to music (would need a lot more work...), but hey, this one did make me laugh a bit, so if you felt the same impulse, it's all good.

Charles Gramlich said...

It sounds much like a song, although you'd probably need some kind of chorus. I like the rhythm, although I'm with you that a little clear rhyme goes a long way.

Lana Gramlich said...

I think it works here--sounds like a song, as Charles said. I'm with you on not typically writing in rhyme (poetry or not,) but there's something to be said for the creativity challenge of writing that way.

i beati said...


morton said...

you rhymed

and it had a good feel to it.

good job and such.

ivan@creativewriting.ca said...

I like it. I like it!


Mona said...

...yea...and maybe together you can save the night...

Ultra Toast Mosha God said...

Lust is a beautiful beast indeed.